"Attach a Dream then Set It Free"

[trob226]

I was alluding that the bracketed actions were of unconscious action. That they had a life of their own. So the wepons fell from the person by themselves of their own will. And the fingers were tasting the sins they commited, as if they were separate entities from the protagonist.

Good point, there was a lot I was attempting to convey in that piece.


Chi Miigwech for your input niji

Ah. Knowing that enriches the poem for me, adds another dimension. Nice.

[OneidaDreamer]

Makes me feel melancholy. Is there a particular reason some of the words are in brackets?

I was alluding that the bracketed actions were of unconscious action. That they had a life of their own. So the wepons fell from the person by themselves of their own will. And the fingers were tasting the sins they commited, as if they were separate entities from the protagonist.

Good point, there was a lot I was attempting to convey in that piece.


Chi Miigwech for your input niji

[trob226]

Makes me feel melancholy. Is there a particular reason some of the words are in brackets?

[OneidaDreamer]

Kind of rhymey. But not bad rhymey. Some of my work tended to be rhymey at times. I have gone through many evolutions since age 12. Poetry takes on a life of its own; depending on mood or the moon or one's emotional/spiritual/physical state or what have you...

[OneidaDreamer]

Oh wash away the fear,
and sail away the sun;
Bequeath the mountaintops,
or fall forever in dismay;

Only the Moon herself,
will tell, of a frozen
blackened, littered, sight...

Disquiet, dispassion, when all
else fails; {away fall your weapons}
What you seek to destroy will
relent;
The stains on your fingers;
{Lick their own sins}

Bittersweet laughter begins with
strangers in the night;
Trading remarks; the loneliness
sets in

Attach a dream, then set it free
Only what will be, will be...