Lyricist Lounge Show

[SmokeEater]

Just trying to keep this from being buried? Any takers? I may start this up in the 49 Forum, just to be on the safe side.

[Grits & Beans]

Thanks for the love. And as far as radioplay goes, I know a deejay at a Standing Rock radio station that said she'd love to play my songs, you when I start recording them.

Anyways I want more feedback. That way I don't feel like a herb. Where you at Jibby and Smokey? lol.

[DaBear23]

damn........

:clap:

You ladies got some mad skills....much props Carmen, your flow is genuine and real..I hope to get to hear your voice on the radio some day....bumping the tunes!! I know ill bump in it muh rez bomb.! anyways......good stuff...ladies very impresive...peace and one :Thumbs

[LittleCricket]

GAH!! carmen , that doot on that other site did get your blood boiling!!
But you showed him who rules the rhymes :Thumbs
Glad to see you've been doin' some writing while you were away..
:D

[Grits & Beans]

This is the follow up to the last battle rhyme I posted. Don't get offended. It's not directed to you. :D

Why you testing my aim? I'll put a paint ball in your eyesocket
Why you testing my game? I'll shoot a 8 ball in your side pocket

I intentionally approach you the wrong way to get on your bad side
Toy around with your nerve endings and sit on your mad vibe

I create bars assembly line style like hershey factories
Radioactivate your blood stream like acid from batteries

Lock on your target like a radar a sandstorm's in your forecast
Then pull a three sixty and transform in a cold flash

Check it! I got multies but I'm more versatile
Wait, hold up! It's time for me to switch my style

If you have any room "in those genes" for a "genuine" rhyme trait
Then I'll plant a seed and just maybe you can get your rhyme str8

I'm "disturbing" sick sentences with "ludacris" expression
"the peace" is nowhere to be found I lash out w/ aggression

I'll have you "crazy in love" but "baby boy" you don't move me
This here the real "Carmen" "beyonce" just played 1 in a movie

And that's "lyrically spoken" like a genius I'll "fracture" your whole structure
It's easy to be "never scared" when you carry weight like "bone crusher"

I don't have to say more I knocked you out with this last bar
Mess around with me again and get your head smashed hard...

Well, what do you think? You liked it?

[Grits & Beans]

Thanks for the love guys.

Here's a battle rhyme I posted earlier on another website:

Let me tell you something cause your weak
Diamond in the rough, hey kid

You couldn't maintain a "winning streak"
If you was rhyming in the buff, naked

I'll knock you out the starting spot make you the benchwarmer
Play baseball with your head swing the bat and clinch homers

I'll show off my text
Lyrical muscles flex

And bench press that jack a** then

Crack whips
For trying to match scripts

With the best at back smashing

You're gonna lose to me sure as you'd lose against Cassius
You know what your doing shaking your a** batting your eyelashes

I run this
With iron fists

I just played ya like a girl queer please

Take notes
On how I break throats

Cause I'm major like the world series...

[bushy_braids]

da realness

HOTTNESS!! you know that'll blow up cause all us can relate! go head chickey...and good luck w/the music biz, it's a lotta hard work & that's dope you got ndn's on ur side helpin' you produce... i'll be checkin' for pw.com to have it for sale too!

[Jibby™]

Sounds cho, Carmen!

That's gonna be blastin in all the rez bomb's next season. Dayum, I can already picture myslef bumpin ugly's to that one.

[Grits & Beans]

I'm not here to battle. I'm just going to showcase some skills. This a verse from a song I'm working on. It's called Last 9. It's going to be a feel good party jam. Check it out and give me your two cents. Jackers will get dealt so don't try it. ;)


You know I been around the block a few times
I got my freak on once or twice at a few nines
I hustle night and day in the land of purple rain
Weekends are my time to forget the fast lane
And powwows are the ideal three day getaways
I go often as I can go those are my better days
If I meet a honey and we click check this out, listen
Would you mind if we're alone from 9:00-10:00 pm?
You need to know me you see I'm from Minnesota
You'd have a good time by my side let me show ya
I'd like for us to get acquainted just you and I
Park the ride someplace private and let the sparks fly
Then we'll head to the nine and get our groove on
Until sunrise that's when I break camp and move on
We might not chill again this could be the last nine
Get it in perspective there might not be a next time
So get into it...

That's some hot sh*t. I'm working with a DJ/Producer and fellow native emcee to provide me with a hot beat. It's a masterpiece in the works. It's going to be hot.

[SmokeEater]

Patiently Waiting...

[Jibby™]

Oh snap! Alright then. I didn't notice that Smoket replied. You'll hear mine tonight.

[Grits & Beans]

...the clock's ticking...:D

[SmokeEater]

Go ahead Jibby... Ladies first.

[Grits & Beans]

I flipped a quarter and got heads. So who goes first Smokey?

You two have a 1 week deadline (from today) to post. Since I'm officiating this I can't vote. Good luck...

[Jibby™]

Tails...

But to add on to your rules. People got to explain why they're voting for someone, can't just be a popularity contest. Got to make it fair for my opponent ;)